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[Inglés] Wishing

Wishing

If i could wish for anything
I would wish a little something
Something that make strive
A thing to push me hard
Some reason for keeping on in live
Where would I start?


If I could wish for anything
I’d wish for your gone smile
If I could wish for something
I’d wish the times that had faded away
If I could wish for anything
I’d wish to tell you the things I couldn’t say
If I could wish for something
I’d wish to disappear in the air


Tell me, where have you gone?
Tell me, what can I do?
Tell me, what have I done?
Tell me, can I be forgiven?


The clock ticks away
The sky has fell down
The darkness has come to stay
The genius has become a clown


Tell me, where have you gone?
Tell me, what can I do?
Tell me, what have I done?
Tell me… can I be forgiven?


I’m just striving for a wish
Living between hope and anguish
With no road to escape
With no road to escape


Living, living
Dying, dying
Missing, missing
Wishing, wishing


Maybe early I could have the right
Maybe early I could have the wish
But now there’s no more light
Now there’s no place where I can go
There’s no time travel machine
Trapped in a labyrinth “sin fin”


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Lee mi Fanfic: Pokémon Shi Daos


#2
Maravilloso como todos los poemas tuyos que he leido hasta el momento.

Me sigue pareciendo atrevido y a la vez maravilloso que escribas en ingles.

En lo que al poema en si se refiere esta muy bien hecho. Deberías probar a hacerlo más estructurado. Por ejemplo, la segunda estrofa, que esta formado por cuatro lineas, podrías separarlo en dos para que el poema quede de la siguiente manera:

6, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 6

Lo que haría que quede más bonito a la vista. ;)
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